my message to a girl in friendster.

[Spidy R]

Hi guys, this is wad i type to a girl who check me out after i checked her profile in friendster.com. Btw my profile is purposefully made boring as i think its not a great place to make new friends. And here it goes.

"Hey hey, did u just check out my profile? i charge 1 dollar
for that alright. i know its a really boring profile
by the way.. and if u agree, wow we sure think alike. great...

im curious... isnt it tiring to check on everyone
that viewed ur profile?

damn, i just hope that u would turn out to be a
stalker ok.. hahaa..

talk to u again, and please remind me to give u my
bank account no. so u can transfer the cash."

And guess what she replied? A "oh?"

I gonna need help from you guys here. Whats my mistakes in this message??

i guess i write too much for the first message.

Btw advises for internet dating will be appreciated.

 

[jonwon]

you sold yourslef short, boring profile i know we agree, find a nice line.
My profile is unique do you like it?

To much spam also, i dont like online dating myself, dont think there is a definitive answer, but i dont think selling yourself short is it, put it that way.

 

[DarkLight]

Ya... overall its pretty barney.

Its like you smelled what C/F was, one time while walking by a hot-dog stand. And now your trying to re-create it, w/o any understanding of what being "cool" is.

Cut it in half, and make it more Suave/Bad-ass. Too hokey'

 

[Rebound Material]

talk to u again, and please remind me to give u my
bank account no. so u can transfer the cash."

THAT WAS SOOOOO RANDOM.

 

[jonwon]

Its has darklight put, c&f ripped and pasted with an hope one will get a result.

 

[speakeasy]

Sorry, that was pretty lame.

 

[Spidy R]

Ya... overall its pretty barney.

Its like you smelled what C/F was, one time while walking by a hot-dog stand. And now your trying to re-create it, w/o any understanding of what being "cool" is.

Cut it in half, and make it more Suave/Bad-ass. Too hokey'

Alright, i kinda find it weird now after looking at the message i typed to her.. As if, yeah sounds like a cut and paste sentence. Ok, so its better to just type "Hey whats up! Did you just checked on my profile? My profiles interesting, isnt it? Taking a second look of mine, yeah you better go edit your profile now.".