A test of Player_Supreme style e-mails.

[So pimp its scary]

I went out this afternoon with a woman that I used to date a little while back, and I thought that writing her an e-mail would be appropriate to explain the kiss... so, I would appreciate how you would correct the e-mail, and if it is satisfactory I will send it and see the results. I will be quoting from some of your past e-mail examples... forgive me. Here we go :
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Hi,

I had a great time with you today, even if it was short. I remembered the level of passion at the opening of our friendship,

the little sparkle in your eyes,

the taste of your lips the first time I kissed you,

the softness and caring in your voice made me tremble, and remembering the feeling of your skin as it was sliding against mine. All these feelings flooding my senses, I had to taste those soft lips of yours again... to catch your delicious smell once again.

Anxiously awaiting your call...

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I now post this for your scrutiny, and for others if they feel that they have a contribution to make for this.

 

[bugsquish]

I would drop "anxiously awaiting your call", a bit AFC no?

 

[b's nuts]

you didn't just quote playere_supreme, you pretty much used his whole email, why don't you just write your own?

 

[So pimp its scary]

Well, I wrote it using things that he was saying in his e-mails, and adjusted it to fit the situation between me and the girl.

And, anxiously awaiting is the part that I was struggling with...

 

[bugsquish]

What about "call me, biatch"?

 

[So pimp its scary]

lol... that would completely change the flow of the e-mail.

 

[b's nuts]

might i suggest :

P.S. next time we meet bring knee pads, you'll need them.

 

[bugsquish]

on a serious note,

"until next time.... x"

 

[white_hype]

emails are afc

write the letter on a piece of paper and use your own blood for ink

 

[Starman]

say my pants are bulging in anticipation of your phonecall

 

[So pimp its scary]

untill next time... much better.

e-mails can be afc, it's ideal for this situation... I know this woman really well.

 

[bugsquish]

lol @ blood for ink

 

[Player_Supreme]

Not bad. Not bad at all. Can I make a suggestion :
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Hi,

I had a great time with you today, even if it was short. I remembered the level of passion at the opening of our friendship,

the little sparkle in your eyes,

the taste of your lips the first time I kissed you,

the softness and caring in your voice made me tremble, and remembering the feeling of your skin as it was sliding against mine. All these feelings flooding my senses, I had to taste those soft lips of yours again... to catch your delicious smell once again.

Anxiously awaiting your call...

***change this part...cause your a man and your not waiting for anybodies call******

I like your style of writing bro. But I would also suggest suggesting her to email you back so that we could all read it...

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I'm amazed at your writing. Romantic..passionate...sensual...beautifully done bruh...You can still be like this and still be a vital real man.


Oh take out the tremble...sounds to AFC and weak. your not a doe trembling in the forest....your the lion in the jungle...

 

[Player_Supreme]

Originally posted by b's nuts
you didn't just quote playere_supreme, you pretty much used his whole email, why don't you just write your own?

sorry but it's not mine...I actually learned from him. I like what he said in his. He adopted my style though.

 

[Player_Supreme]

Ok I've read some of the other comments.

How about ending with:

I will be home tonight at xxxxxx...I want you to call me then.

or

just drop the whole ending and see how this fish bites.

 

[So pimp its scary]

First, thanks.

This is what I will be sending to her....
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Hi,

I had a great time with you today, even if it was short. I remembered the level of passion at the opening of our friendship,

the little sparkle in your eyes,

the taste of your lips the first time I kissed you,

the softness and caring in your voice, and remembering the feeling of your skin as it was sliding against mine. All these feelings flooding my senses, I had to taste those soft lips of yours again... to catch your delicious smell once again.

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I will post the reply when it comes...

 

[Player_Supreme]

good job pimp. I hope these guys comments don't scare you off...It takes a real man to stand up and be different. Welcome to the club.

 

[Click Here]

i think it needs an ending. i'd say something less then "anxious" tho. hmm....


I anticipate the next time our lips meet again...

 

[Player_Supreme]

I like that ending, may I borrow it

 

[rastlin2021]

I think you should use "We" instead of "I".

Hi,

We had a great time together today, even if it was short. I remembered the level of passion between us when we were together which were never experienced before with anyone else.