please correct or review

[ROOKIE OF THE YEAR]

well, i made a script like david D. taught me on what i should say (default thing) if i see a hot babe sitting down and either studying, eating, or whatever she's doing by herself. I read DYD and advanced dating techniques. im trying to be ****y and funny. So whoever use the ****y+funny style on hitting on girls and suceed, or shall say chick magnets, please give me a few pointers, review or corrections. Thanks, here goes:

ME: Excuse me, you could need some company

HER: OK, sure

ME: ok as in whatever or impulsive ok.

HER: ?
ME: I mean....it just that.... you must not be very attraction.... since you're all by yourself anyway.
HER: (a) ("WHATEVER" impression)
(b) Actually, I'm waiting for friend(s).
(c) (doing casual thing like studying, etc.)
(d) I'm waiting for my boyfriend.

ME: (a) oh.. i know that look (refer to "whatever") Look, I,m sorry. But people like you just hurts my feelings when they treat like a sex object.
(b) oh i see.... so what's your objective today. Competing w/ each or just flirt for fun.
(c) yeeeah (sarcastically). nice disguise.... what are you really here for?....wait let me guess... you're here to flirt.
(d) oh, so anyway, is he a provider or a sex toy?

HER: (a) No. (the i-cant-believe-you-just-said that-look) blah, blah,blah
(b) (blah,blah,blah)
(c) No (blah blah blah)
(d) Neither. (blah blah blah)
ME: (a) ok (sarcastically) So what are doing here?.......wait let me guess... you're here to flirt.
(b) Oh....so basically you guys are regrouping on what to say to guys huh.
(c) sure (sarcastically) anyway, I'm ROOKIE. (preparing for handshake)
(d) Then you must be his giver then...........or his sex toy.

HER: (a) no (blah blah blah)
(b) no (blah blah blah)
(c) Im (name)
(d) No (blah blah blah)

ME: (a)...... sure (sarcastically) anyway, I'm ROOKIE. (preparing for handshake)
(b)........(smile while pausing) anyway, I'm ROOKIE. (preparing for handshake)
(c) SEE.... we're best friends already.
(d) ......(smile while pausing) anyway, I'm rookie.

HER: (a) I'm (name)
(b) I'm (name)
(c) blah blah blah
(d) I'm (name)

ME: (a) SEE.... we're best friends already.
(b) SEE.... we're best friends already.
(c) you got e-mail?
(d) SEE.... we're best friends already.

HER: a,b,and d) you got e-mail?

 

[ROOKIE OF THE YEAR]

PS

a refer to a, b refer to b, etc. Can you guys PLEASE visualize the situation I'm in with the hot babe. Those who read DYD and suceeded, i really looked to you guys as my wingmen. I took a long time to write this down. THANKS A MILLION FOR HELPING.

 

[ROOKIE OF THE YEAR]

boo hoo

boo hoo, no ones responding

 

[Donald Kaufman]

I can't quite figure out what you are trying to say. Perhaps you are using words you aren't very comfortable with. Try following just one of the conversation threads using words you are more familiar with.

 

[PuertoRican_Lover]

Don't do what may work for others - do what is comfortable for you! Sincerity is at times much better then trying to be ****y and funny and using sexual overtones!

 

[Kaine]

ME: I mean....it just that.... you must not be very attraction.... since you're all by yourself anyway.

Nothing like a good ol fashioned insult to start a relationship.

Why don't you just drop your pants and tell her to suck your monster schlong while you're at it. ****y to you, funny to me.

Kaine

 

[diablo]

There is no way you can know how a conversation is going to go - this is why canned lines are crap. What if instead of saying one of the options from A-D she says "Get the f*ck away from me", or better yet, "That's my bodybuilding boyfriend standing behind you with the drinks he went up and got - I think he heard you say I'm not very attractive... don't worry, Rookie, I promise it's only going to hurt for a minute"... If using canned lines and hoping that the conversation will fall within the parameters that you've laid out for us here is what helps you get into the field and stop theorizing online, by all means go for it. I wouldn't, but that's just me.

 

[skinnydart]

I think your anyalying the whole thing to much, it's impossible to make a tree of every possible answer/responce.